Of Galis and Jokers

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By The ShaMan on Tuesday, December 16, 2003 - 12:00 pm:

Cloaks not filled with bodies,
Masks that hide no faces.
Stealthy power is an attribute
That defines these shadow races.

A flashing scythe,
A soul-searing light.
If you duel a Joker,
You're in for quite a fight.

A sun-mask of gold,
A maddened charge.
Your monster will fall to the Gali,
No matter how large.

If you train
One of these mighty beings,
You won't be dissapointed
When the fight bell rings.


By The ShaMan on Tuesday, December 16, 2003 - 12:01 pm:

did you guys like this one? i dont think i rhymed the last stanza very well


By Nate Railsback on Wednesday, December 17, 2003 - 01:31 am:

It's not an issue of rhyming, but one of cadence and rhythm. You need to get a steady pattern to the rhythm, in my opinion, though of course there's no one way to do poetry. Still looks relatively good. First stanza was the best.


By CHB on Wednesday, December 17, 2003 - 01:44 am:

I'm with Nate. You choose the right grammar to rhyme, but you threw off the beat with more words before hand.

Not overly bad, but needing improvement. Can't do anything but better next time.